英语书面表达【英语书面表达“修改检查”的有效途径】

　　英语书面表达往往要经过认真审题、拟出表达要点、根据要点扩展成文、修改检查这几个步骤才能完成。而修改检查是写好一篇文章、提高表达质量、取得高分的关键。那么，在书面表达时，我们如何进行修改检查呢？
　　一、修改
　　在书面表达中，对一篇文章的修改，我们应注意以下几个方面。
　　1.恰当使用同义词或近义词，避免因词语的重复使用而造成的文章表达的单一性
　　请看下面一段描写与他人联系方式及接受新闻信息的今昔对比文字：
　　Over the past twenty years or so，great changes have taken place in our life. Take my family for example. My parents contacted others mainly by sending them letters in the past，but now we get in touch with them by telephone at home. And once my parents listened to the radio for news and other information，now we watched the news and other programs on TV instead.
　　以上一小段文字中，在表达“联系”时用了contact与get in touch with、“过去”用了in the past与once、“但是”用了but与instead，从而避免了单词的前后重复使用，使得句子的表达灵活多变，且无烦琐之感。
　　2.适当增加修饰语句，使得句子的表达有血有肉，更加丰满，避免句子表达的枯燥、干瘪
　　请看下面一组描写住房条件的今昔对比的句子：
　　（1）About twenty years ago，my parents lived in a small room，but now we have moved into a large house.
　　（2）When they got married about twenty years ago，my parents lived in a small room crowded with furniture，but now we have moved into a large new three-room apartment.
　　比较之下，第（2）句无论在句子结构上，还是在语句的修饰方面，显然比第（1）句更自如、更有文采。
　　3.删除冗余词语，使句子显得更简洁、利落
　　有些考生在进行书面表达时，担心文章的词数不足，便刻意在句中增加一些修饰成分。这样，反而适得其反，会大大影响文章的表达效果。体会一下下面的一段文字，看看删除了括号中的词语以后，是否给人一种要言不烦、简洁流畅的感觉呢？
　　When they got married about twenty years ago，my parents lived in a small room（and it was ）crowded with furniture，but now we have moved into a large new three-room apartment （in a new building）.In short，changes （that have taken place）in our life in the past twenty years have brought us comfort and convenience.
　　4.适当转换句式，使句子结构长短交错，生动活泼
　　例如：
　　（1）Mike doesn’t like swimming in summer， and his brother doesn’t like swimming，either.
　　可转换成：Mike doesn’t like swimming in summer， and neither does his brother.（倒装句）
　　（2）We should do something to prevent such a mistake from being made again.
　　可转换成：Something should be done to prevent such a mistake from being made again.（被动结构）
　　以上两句通过转换，意义没变，但表达效果大不相同。
　　5.尽量运用高级词汇或句式，来增加文章表达文采，提高文章得分档次
　　高级词汇的选择主要体现在用高中所学词汇来代替初中所学词汇，用书面语词汇来代替口语词汇，并能运用课本外所掌握词汇来代替课本中所学词汇。高级句式主要是指分词、定语从句、介词短语、省略句、修饰性状语等。请体会一下下面几个句子中的划线部分被句后括号中的词汇或句式替代后的效果。
　　例如：
　　（1）I’m writing to tell you something about a flat for you. （inform you of ）
　　（2）The bathroom and the kitchen are very good.（well furnished）
　　（3）The flat has an area of 25 square meters and has a bedroom，a bathroom and a kitchen. （with）
　　（4）The flat situates in a building on Fangcao Street，and it is not far from Jianxin Chinese School. （which）